老师你上次说 第一段 和第二段 要有一个承上启下的句子。那个句子请问要如何写 包含那些东西。 然后看一下这篇挑错跳的对吗 The argument that providing a well-equipped gym for the company’s employees will reduce the cost of insurance coverage and help better manage the budget omits many important aspects that needed to be addressed to substantiate the argument. The fact that people exercise regularly are hospitalized less than people do not serves merely as a fact that per se does not support or buttress the main argument nor does it constitute a logical argument in favor of the main argument. First off, providing a gym does not make people more likely to use it, especially for those who do not regularly exercise. Second, that people hospitalized less may not reduce the cost of the health coverage. It is possible that people exercise more regularly tend to face more severe illness such as major spine injury. Such illnesses may in fact increase the cost of the health insurance coverage. ( even putting people to exercise can help reduce the cost of the health insurance coverage, reduction of 50% on the cost of health insurance will not be for sure. Moreover a balanced town budget is depend on many other aspects as well. There is no guarantee that such balanced budget is solely depend on the reduction of insurance cost.这个算是同一点吗 ) Also, It is possible that exercise has nothing to do with hospitalization. The people who exercise regularly now may just happened to be a group of people who do not like to go to hospital, even when they know they are sick. last, it is also possible that people can enjoy some benefit other than what one can enjoy from a well- equipped gym such as good air, feeling of the season environment, when exercising in a nature environment is the major reason why people can have a good health and are less hospitalized.

老师你上次说 第一段 和第二段 要有一个承上启下的句子。那个句子请问要如何写 包含那些东西。 然后看一下这篇挑错跳的对吗 The argument that providing a well-equipped gym for the company’s employees will reduce the cost of insurance coverage and help better manage the budget omits many important aspects that needed to be addressed to substantiate the argument. The fact that people exercise regularly are hospitalized less than people do not serves merely as a fact that per se does not support or buttress the main argument nor does it constitute a logical argument in favor of the main argument. First off, providing a gym does not make people more likely to use it, especially for those who do not regularly exercise. Second, that people hospitalized less may not reduce the cost of the health coverage. It is possible that people exercise more regularly tend to face more severe illness such as major spine injury. Such illnesses may in fact increase the cost of the health insurance coverage. ( even putting people to exercise can help reduce the cost of the health insurance coverage, reduction of 50% on the cost of health insurance will not be for sure. Moreover a balanced town budget is depend on many other aspects as well. There is no guarantee that such balanced budget is solely depend on the reduction of insurance cost.这个算是同一点吗 ) Also, It is possible that exercise has nothing to do with hospitalization. The people who exercise regularly now may just happened to be a group of people who do not like to go to hospital, even when they know they are sick. last, it is also possible that people can enjoy some benefit other than what one can enjoy from a well- equipped gym such as good air, feeling of the season environment, when exercising in a nature environment is the major reason why people can have a good health and are less hospitalized.